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Band 5.5

The pie charts show the reasons why people travel to work by car or by bicycle

The pie charts show the reasons why people travel to work by
car
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 or by
bicycle
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.
Overall
Linking Words
, it is clear
by
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that
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 riding a bike to go to work is healthier and
less
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has fewer
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problems
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to
Verb problem
compared to
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compare
Verb problem
driving
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 a
car
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, when it comes to
the
Correct article usage
a
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car
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 is comfortable and safer
too
Rephrase
apply
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than cycling
and
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, and
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 it can closer the distance rather than a
bike
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longer distance
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. Looking at charts in more detail, we can witness that if we can think that
overall
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problems
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 and its
problems
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 100%, and we can see that from the
chart
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 it does not harmful to the environment, A
bicycle
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 is more helpful to the environment than a
car
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, because it does not cause pollution, and useful for health, there was given percentage of the types of advantages, 30% for health, 30% to the environment and there is no doubt with parking
problems
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 and it shows 15%, and it does not need spend money for all time like a
car
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 13%, the main but a bit dangerous faster
then
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 a
car
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 because it does not stick in the traffic everywhere it has a small road for riding and so that faster than driving a
car
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;
chart
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 shows 12 percentages. Focusing on the second
chart
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 there shows benefits of the
car
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, the main reason is comfort because it is comfortable than a
bicycle
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 and it is true the
chart
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 shows 40% to it, the distance does not matter when you go to with a
car
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 so that the percentage like that 21%, but it is a bit upper than a
bicycle
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 to compare its speed 14%, and helpful for carrying things too 14%, and when it comes to the safety its safer than a
bicycle
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 on the road.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, bicycle, problems, chart with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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