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Having more international sporting events (such as the Olympic Games) may promote world peace. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Many people believe that international sporting events,
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 as the Olympic Games, can help create world peace. I agree to a large extent,
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 their influence is limited. On the one hand, these events bring countries together in a peaceful way. Athletes from different nations compete fairly and follow the same rules.
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 helps people understand other cultures and reduces negative attitudes.
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, international relationships can improve.
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, sports cannot stop serious political or economic conflicts. Many problems between countries are deep and long-standing. In some cases, international competitions may even increase tension by encouraging extreme nationalism. In conclusion, international sporting events can help promote peace by bringing people together.
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, they cannot solve global conflicts on their own, and real peace requires political cooperation.

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