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Band 4

Q. Air pollution is currently a big issue in most industrialized cities causing respiratory problems and changes in weather patterns. What do you think are the causes of this? What measures can be taken to reduce air pollution?

Today,
due to
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 the global
industrialization
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industrialisation
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 advancement in the technical field, the world is suffering from the consequences of
pollution
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 and its adverse impacts on health and
weather
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the weather
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.
Air
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 deterioration is one of the biggest threats of them all. In
this
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paragraphs
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paragraph
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, I will state some of the reasons and the remedies
to
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for
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 these.
To begin
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 with,
air
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pollution
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 is mostly caused by
smoke
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realeased
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released
 by the growing industrial sector and transportation. To be specific, more and more power plants are being set up to keep up with the rising need for energy,which means more
smoke
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 containing
contaminents
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contaminants
 are dumped out
the
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into the
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enviroment
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environment
.
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Further more
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Furthermore
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, transportations
such
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 as
car
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cars
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 or
motorbike
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motorbikes
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 produce a huge amount of gas
out
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apply
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in the
air
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, which
cause
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causes
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 the
air
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 to be polluted.
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, extensive use of means of transportation caused a higher amount of fuel to
burn
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be burned
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 and
hence
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 more
smoke
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 and heat
released
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to be released
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 to the environment in the USA , causing low-quality in
air
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.
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quality.
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 Moving
further
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,some of the preventive measures that can be used to heal the environmental
pollution
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 can be,
a
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an
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 introduction of new policies by the government to control the emission of harmful
smoke
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 from the industries.
Secondly
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, the use of media can be a step to help create awareness among the countrymen.
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, running advertisements on
televisions
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television
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 that promote the use of public transport
instead
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 of personal vehicles. These can be considered as some of the effective ways to reduce environmental
pollution
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. To
conlude
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conclude
, I believe that
this
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 problem has and will be causing more harm to humanity.
However
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 ,only if governments and citizens work together can the problem be solved

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task management
Plan your writing. Say the reason at the start, then give a small example.
structure
Put one idea in each paragraph. Start with a short line that tells the idea.
cohesion
Use link words to join ideas, like and, but, also, because.
accuracy
Fix spell and grammar. see errors such as realeased, enviroment, conlude.
examples
Give real and simple examples to back ideas. Talk about cars and factories and how they make smoke.
overall progress
You try to answer the task and give some points.
content strength
You give clear ideas like policy and ads.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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