The graph below shows the percentage of households with different kinds of technology in the U.S. from 1995 to 1999.Summarize the informationby selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph
illustrate
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illustrates
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the percentage of
households
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households'
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usage
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of five types of electronic devices in
US
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the US
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between 1995 to 1999.
Overall
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,
Number
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the Number
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of washing
machine
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machines
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,
Computer
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computers
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and
Phone
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phones
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usage
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steadly
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steadily
increased
overthe
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over the
period of time,
while
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DVD
usage
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decline
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declined
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bedtween
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between
1995 to 1996 and
agin
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again
shape
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apply
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incresed
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increased
up to 40%
at
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in
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1999.
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The Intrenet
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Intrenet
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Internet
became more
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populer
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popular
since 1995 and but its
flacuated
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fluctuation
time to time.
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However
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it has steady growth. The
wasing maching
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washing machine
having
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was
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the
highst
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highest popular electronic device
populer
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electonice divice,
while
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DVD
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the DVD
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player became the
lest
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least
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populer
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popular
.
Internet
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The Internet
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start
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started
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with 10%
usage
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in 1995 and
end
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ended
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with
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as
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fourth
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the fourth
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populer divice
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popular device
in 1999.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words usage, populer with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percent
  • households
  • technology
  • increase
  • rise
  • grow
  • steady
  • rapid
  • sharp
  • gradual
  • level
  • high
  • low
  • by 1999
  • from 1995
  • over the period
  • in general
  • overall
  • compare
  • contrast
  • trend
  • pattern
  • reach
  • start
  • end
  • almost
  • nearly
  • gap
  • common
  • become
  • different
  • more
  • less
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