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Band 4.5

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wheere relevant

The line graph and table illustrate the average
temperatures
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 and the average number of hours
sunshine
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of sunshine
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 per year
of
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in
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London
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, New
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york
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York
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 and
Sydney
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.
Overall
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,
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Sydney
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Sydney's
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 average
temperatures
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 change between 15 to 30,
while
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other
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the other
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 two cities stay
average
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apply
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between 0 to 30 degrees. In January
month
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apply
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,
Sydney
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recodaded
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recorded
highest
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its highest
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temperatures
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,
while
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London
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 and New
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york
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York
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where
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were
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at
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apply
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below 10
degree
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degrees
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.
Its
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It
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 shows
London
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 and
new
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New York
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york
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 drastically increased
temperatures
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form
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from
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january
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January
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 to
july
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July
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 and reached a
peack
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peak
 at about 28 and 23
respectvily
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respectively
 before falling
at
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by
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 10% in
december
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December
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.
Sydney
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showes
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shows
 the
complite oppsite
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complete opposite
 trend and in
january
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January
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 its
reched
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apply
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highest average
teprature
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temperature
 at about 28% and
then
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decline
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declined
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 to
at
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apply
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between 15 to 20
in
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°C in
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 July
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then
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, then
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gredually
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gradually
 climbed up to 20%
in
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°C
 between July to December.
By Contrast
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, New
York
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recived
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received
 2535 hours of
day light
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daylight
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while
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sydney
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Sydney
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 and
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london
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London
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get
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received
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 2475 and 1180
sunlight
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hours of daylight,
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 respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperatures, london, york, sydney with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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