Some parents believe that reading books for entertainment is a waste of children’s time. They think that their children should read only serious educational books. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

MANY PARENTS SAY THAT
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NOT USEFUL FOR
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'S TIME, AND
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'S FOCUS SHOULD BE ON EDUCATIONAL
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ONLY.
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ESSAY WILL DISCUSS BOTH OF THE VIEWS,
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ENTERTAINMENT
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DON'
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TEACH REAL
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SKILLS, I BELIEVE THAT
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'S NEED
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ENTERTAINMENT
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FOR ENTERTAINMENT
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AND
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IS THE BEST CHOICE .
FUN
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DON'
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PROVIDE REAL
LIFE
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SKILLS,
ENTERTAINMENT
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BOOKS
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DON'
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GIVE ANY
KNOWLEGDE
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KNOWLEDGE
ON REAL
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SITUATIONS LIKE EDUCATIONAL
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DOES
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, BECAUSE
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COMES
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FROM THE FICTION OF THE WRITER, IT'S NOT
BESSED
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BASED
ON
SCINIFICANT
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SCIENTIFIC
FACTS, OR REALISTIC
INFORMATION
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INFORMATION.
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FOR EXAMPLE
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ACADMIC
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ACADEMIC
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GIVE KNOWLEDGE ON SUBJECTS LIKE MATH,
PHSYSIC
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PHYSICS
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CONTINUE , WHICH HELPS WITH THE
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ACADEMIC
PREFORMANCE
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PERFORMANCE.
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HOWEVER
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, I BELIEVE THAT
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CHILDREN'S
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NEED
ENTERTAINMENT
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IN THEIR
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AND
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IS THE BEST
REASOURCE
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RESOURCE
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OF TECHNOLOGICAL
DEVICSES
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DEVICES
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NEED
ENTERTAINMENT
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IN THEIR
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, AND
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CAN GIVE THEM
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ENTERTAINMENT
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ENTERTAINMENT.
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IF ALL
WHAT
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THEY READ
IS
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EDUCATIONAL
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, THEY WILL GET
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OVERWHELMED
AND STOP READING AS
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A WHOLE
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WHOLE
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WHOLE.
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MOREOVER
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, THEY GET
EDUCTIONAL KNOWLDGE
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EDUCATIONAL KNOWLEDGE
FROM
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SCHOOL.
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FOR
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REASON, I BELIEVE THAT
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IS THE BEST SOURCE FOR
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IN
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CHILDREN
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LIFE
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IN CONCLUSION,
ALTHOUGH
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FUN
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TEACH
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LIFE
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-SKILLS AND MEANINGFUL KNOWLEDGE, I BELIEVE THAT BALANCE IS THE KEY, AND
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OF FINDING
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ON THE IPHONE, THEY CAN RAPLACE IT WITH
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task response
Plan your essay. Start with an intro that restates the prompt in your own words and state your view. Then write one paragraph for each side and a short conclusion that repeats your view.
task response
Give real reasons for each view. Use one or two simple examples from life or school to back up your points.
coherence and cohesion
Make your point clear and keep to one main idea in each paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words to connect ideas, like but, also, however, and for example, to show how ideas fit together.
content
The writer shows a clear stance and an aim to discuss both views.
structure
There is effort to balance views and end with a view.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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