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The table below shows information about the population in New Zealand from 2011 to 2012 by age group.

The table
show
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shows
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 the data about the change of population in New
Zealend
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Zealand
 between 2011 and 2012 by
age
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 category.
Overall
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,
while
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 the youngest
age
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 groups decreased across the period, the reverse is true for the oldest ones. It is
also
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 evident that
,
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 there was a marginal increase in population rates from all
age
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 brackets. Focusing first on decreases, people from under 15
age
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 group stood at 898,160numbers in 2011, considerably less than that of their older counterparts, constituting over 1,5 million.
This
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 disparity has remained relatively consistent in the next year, with both figures changed
for
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by
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unnoticeable
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an unnoticeable
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 0,2%. When it comes to those who
are
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apply
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are older, the reversal trend can be observed. Starting with people aged between 40 and 46, showed 1,331,907 million, and
this
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followed
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was followed
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 by a marginal shift, representing a change
for
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of
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 0.6%.Those from
65+
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the 65+
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age
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 cohort experienced a similar trend. They showed 573,946
number of
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apply
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people before increasing
to around slightly
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slightly to around
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 lower than 600,000.
New
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The New
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Zealend
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Zealand
 population from all ages grew
for
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by
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 0,6%

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "marginal" was used 2 times.
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