The pie chart gives information on UAE government spending in 2000. The total budget was AED 315 billion.

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pie chart illustrates the use of AED 315
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funds by the UAE government in 2000.
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, the biggest investment made during the target year went to Social Security
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while
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the Transport received the lowest amount. Social security peaked in the ranking with major funds allocations of AED 100
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, followed by Health and personal social services at AED 53
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,
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, twice less in
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comparison
. Education was the third priority area, receiving AED 38
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, followed by AED 23
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each spent for Debt interest and Other expenses categories,
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Defence
recieved
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received
a comparable amount of AED 22
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. Not more than 17
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went to
subsidize
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the sector of Law and order. The least
subsidized
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sectors were Housing the Heritage
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Environment with AED 15
billion
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expenditures; followed by
the
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apply
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Industry, Agriculture and Employment with a modest allocation of AED 13
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Transportation
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expenditures
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received the minimum support of only AED 9
billion
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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