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Some people think that going to a fitness centare regularly is unnecssary. Instead they believe the combining occasional exrcise(such as going for walk) with a balanced diet is enough to stay healthy. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Staying healthy today is not exclusive for fitness centres
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people
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, you do not need to
appear to
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visit
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 your local gym
everyday
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every day
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, adding good habits to your life
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such
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, such
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 as
swimiing
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swimming
, will keep your
body
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 nice and healthy. Some
people
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 might say
,
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 that in order to stay fit and healthy, you will need to show up at the gym once a
weak
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 at least, because of nowadays lifestyle, and they believe that daily
exrcises
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exercises
is
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are
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 a must
,
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 to have a good looking shape, but
i
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belive
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that is
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 right for
whom
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those who
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 cannot control their eating habits.
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, there are many
people
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think
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who think
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 occasional
body
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 activities
seems
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seem
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 enough, since jogging or walking does not require a fitness centre, but
this
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 should be combined with healthy food options. I agree with
this
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 term, having a good shape and a normal blood pressure is not a mystery,
while
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 there are
variety
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 of options today of sports, walking is a perfect choice, not just for your
body
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, but
also
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 for your mind, since being healthy is something general, not only
body
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 related . In conclusion,
people
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 can argue
,
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 that it is better for your
body
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 to
active
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be active
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everyday
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every day
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, but it is not required if you manage to eat good food and walk.

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task response
State your view clearly in the opening paragraph and keep that view in all parts. Do not mix different sides.
task response
Give one or two clear reasons and add a simple example to show them.
coherence and cohesion
Use easy words and short lines. Use simple links like First, Next, Also, Finally to show how ideas fit.
coherence and cohesion
Group ideas in one paragraph. Start with a topic line and end with a short note that ties to the view.
idea
The essay shows that you think about life outside a gym and that diet matters.
structure
You try to weigh both sides and end with a view.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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