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Some people believe that eventually all jobs will be done by artificial robots. What is your opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your knowledge or experience.

Techonlogy
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Technology
became
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has become
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 very common nowadays. It helps
people
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 in many ways , so
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life
become
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more
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easier than
the
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in the
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 past. Certain
people
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 argue that
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machine
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machines
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 can be replaced by
human
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humans
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 in many careers. In my opinion, I disagree with the statement partly. In
this
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 the topic.
To begin
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 with, Humans who
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made the
robot
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.
Existing
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The existence
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 of
people
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 in any occupation is very useful. The
machine
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 can work under the rule of
people
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. They just follow the
instruction
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,
while
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 humans can create many new things. There are many
jobs
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robot
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apply
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do
it
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.
For instance
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, arts , teaching,
doctor
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a doctor
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 and so on. All
theses
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these
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kind
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kinds
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 of
jobs
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 need communication,
creative
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creativity
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 and
accurate
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. The
robot
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 can draw beautiful
picture
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pictures
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 but
with out
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without
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 real emotions.
In addition
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, if the
machine
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teach
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teaches
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 the students, the class will become very boring. I believe that dealing with folks is better than dealing with androids because humans can deal with all situations.
On the other hand
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, robots have some positive points. They can work for many hours without feeling tired.
Also
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, they a good in some
jobs
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 like accounting. I believe that
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robot
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robots
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 will become a part of our
life
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lives
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 in the future
which
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, which
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 is a good
.
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thing.
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 They should be in some field which
need
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needs
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 a lot of effort
like
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, like
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 agriculture and
factory
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a factory
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.
In
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addition
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addition,
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 robots can save a lot of information. In conclusion,
Bot
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bots
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 have many positive and negative sides. They help
people
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 in some complex
jobs
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.
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Also
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 they can achieve many tasks in a short time.
While
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people
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 are cleaver than the
machine
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 because they can develop the job and
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think
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 about new
palns
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plans
 and how they can develop
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them
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. Personally, I will not trust robots
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 in sensitive careers. I will not feel comfortable because I like to talk with
some one
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someone
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 who can understand me.

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language
Improve grammar and sentence form. Use simple subject-verb agreement and correct word order.
structure
Make ideas clearer. Put one main idea in each paragraph and use linking words to show order.
content
Give more strong examples and explain how robots affect jobs.
language
Check spelling and use punctuation to show pauses.
structure
The writer states a view and ends with a conclusion.
content
It gives some real examples (arts, teaching, doctor).
coherence
It uses simple link words like To begin with and On the other hand.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • artificial intelligence (AI)
  • automation
  • robotics
  • futuristic developments
  • analyze data
  • analytical precision
  • human capabilities
  • emotional intelligence
  • human interaction
  • human oversight
  • strategic decision-making
  • nuances of human judgment
  • technological landscape
  • intrinsic human qualities
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