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WRITING II In many parts of the world children and teenagers are committing more crimes. Why is this case happening? How should children or teenagers be punished? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

Today's world, the number of criminals has
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and
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 criminal court cases are being exceeded as well.
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, government criminal investigation authorities
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have
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 been
declaired
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declared
 that many crimes are committed by children and teenagers. There are some significant reasons
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that contribute
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 to
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this
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 pathetic situation, and the relevant authorities conduct some actions to punish these youngsters. In
this
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 essay, I am going to
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unfold
 some facts
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this
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 worldwide decline.
Initially
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, when we talk about why these
adolecents
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adolescents
 mostly engage with these activities.
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, strong peer influences. Youngsters or children not
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 in their knowledge, and they always trust their closest friends , and they
more
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apply
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prefer to
buildup
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build
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 a strong bond with their friendship
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lack
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a lack
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 of social knowledge.
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, they put their main effort
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into protecting
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 their friendship.
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, Their
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a high
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curiocity
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curiosity
, excitement and often
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prioritise immediate
 rewards. As an example , many
terrorits
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terrorist
 groups have
child
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terrorits
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terrorist
 forces.
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,
government and the
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the government and
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 other responsible authorities
has been
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have
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 taken some
preventions
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precautions
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 to stop
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violences
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violence
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.
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 as
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child
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resuscitations
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 and mental health conferences .As an instance, the young accused person may spend some time in a
child
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 detention
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.
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, conduct some brain development programmes and
councelling progremmes
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counselling programmes
 to fix their mentality. In conclusion,whenever
,
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apply
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if
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apply
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a
child
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took
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takes
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apart
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part
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of
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in
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 a
criminal
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crime
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, there are some critical reasons for them to
involve
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be involved
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 with
that
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those
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 offenders
and
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, and
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responsible
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the responsible
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 main
departmnet
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department
 should bring some
sollutions
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solutions
 to diminish the
effect
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effects
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 of
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 decline.

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planning
Plan your essay before you write. Make a short plan with a clear title, a small intro, two or three main ideas, and a simple end.
structure
Write a short intro that says what you will talk about, and end with a short conclusion that sums up.
grammar
Use only the right words. Check spellings and use simple grammar. Do not repeat the same phrase.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas fit, like first, also, but, because, so.
content
Give real and clear examples that fit the point you make, and explain why this example proves your idea.
content
The topic is clear and you try to give reasons and a plan for punishment.
content
You show some ideas on why young people may join crime.
structure
You mention methods like detention and mental programs.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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