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Prevention is better than cure. Researching and treating disease is costly so it would be better to invest in preventive measures. To what extent do you agree?

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 is no denying the fact that preventing a disease is better than curing it.
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 it is a commonly held belief that research and treatment are costing highly, so it would be better spent on preventive
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, there is
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 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion,
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 how
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 is much more effective than cure.
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 with, researching related to curing a disease requires a lot of time, money and effort.
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, it requires
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 amount of supplies and materials, developing commands
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 greater amount of money and effort.
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, not all countries can afford
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 immense cost.
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, African countries like Sudan, Cameroon, and Somalia already have huge debts to their accounts, so they can not
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allocate
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 expenses. Another point to consider,
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 needs simple steps to apply. It is
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 could be applied by adding a few steps to the daily routine.
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, all countries can apply
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 instance.
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 the COVID-19 pandemic invaded the world, there was no cure for it, and the only way to survive
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 by preventive
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, like applying sanitisers and washing hands, eating food containing vitamins and keeping a safe distance. In conclusion, despite people having different views,
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 much more effective than cure. For us, we should use preventive
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 by adding them to our daily routines, applying simple steps
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that could rescue us from the possible danger of being sickened.

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Task Response
State your view clearly in the first paragraph and keep to your chosen side.
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Add a strong example for each point and explain how it shows prevention is better.
Coherence and Cohesion
Plan your essay. Use a clear link to move from one idea to the next.
Language
Check grammar and spelling. Fix mistakes like 'divide' and use simple, common words.
Idea
You show a clear aim that prevention is good.
Structure
There is a plan with introduction, body, and conclusion.
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