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Writing Samples
Band 3

nowadays many people travel to foreign countries for pleasure. Some believe this travel has a negative impact on the countries travelled to. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent
years
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 the travel
destinations
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has
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 sparked widespread debate. The opinions are divided
,
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 and supported with strong reasons. On one hand, some people believe that
traveling
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travelling
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 is the best way to know different
culture
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cultures
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, to grow as a person and to achieve knowledge.
There
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These
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 types of
travelers
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travellers
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 prefer the
traditionally
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 locations like ancient cities or memorable monuments.
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, another reason to practice
this
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 type of tourism is the
impovement
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improvement
 of language, by
practicing
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practising
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 it
talking
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by talking
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 directly with the natives. One final reason would be
of
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, of
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 course, the beauty of the
destinations
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,
that
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which
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 can astonish any visitor.
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, the beauty of Venice can
be never
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never be
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 removed from someone's memory for a
livetime
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lifetime
.
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, another
procentage
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percentage
 of the population
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apply
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argue
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argues
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 that the impact of
the
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excesiv
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excessive
 tourism is devastating
,
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.
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Practically
the
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, the
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 most appreciated
touristic
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tourist
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destinations
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 are destroyed. Especially the natives from the most popular
destinations
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 in Europe,
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, try to convince the municipalities to take measures to reduce the daily number of visitors. So far,
this
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lea
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leads
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 to the increase of taxes only.
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, regarding
this
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 time from the economic reason, visiting by visiting their own
country
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country,
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 the people can contribute to the development of
national
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the national
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 economy. A great example here
,
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 would be the negative impact on
american
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American
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 tourism created by the
refuse
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refusal
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 of
canadians
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Canadians
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 to have their vacations in
USA
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the USA
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. The balance for
this
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 is the
benefical
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beneficial
 impact on
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the canadian
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canadian
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Canadian
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 economy because of the higher rate of population visiting Canada.

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task response
State your clear view in the introduction and keep it in every paragraph. It helps the reader know your angle.
structure
Plan your essay with four parts: intro, one paragraph for each view, and a short conclusion that states your view.
coherence
Each paragraph should have one main idea. Use simple linking words like First, Also, But, So to help flow.
coherence
Link examples directly to your point. Do not mix too many ideas in one paragraph.
language
Check spelling and grammar. Simple, common words work best. Incorrect spellings make your message hard to see.
idea
The essay shows you know both sides of travel and its facts.
example
You mention real places as examples, which helps readers see the idea.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural exchanges
  • Global connections
  • Tourism boosts
  • Local economy
  • Over-tourism
  • Environmental degradation
  • Landmarks
  • Commodification of culture
  • Authentic cultural expressions
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Tourism infrastructure
  • Public services
  • Disrespect local customs
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