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the range and quality of food that we can buy has changed due to technological advances. do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages

Nowadays, technological advances have changed many things, including our habits, the quality of
food
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, and what we can buy.
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, I think that the
benefits
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 of
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trend
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 outweigh the drawbacks.
This
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trend
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 has many
benefits
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. All of the
benefits
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 can let us
to
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apply
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get
variety
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a variety
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 of
lifestyle
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in
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apply
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these
day
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. One of the
benefits
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are
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is
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 correlated with the
transportation
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 that can
improt
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import
 different kinds of meat, seafood and even fresh dairy products from all over the world.
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, if we want to eat the fresh seafood from other continents, they have the
frezzer
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freezer
 on the
airplane
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aeroplane
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 that can preserve the
freshness
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food
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 during
the
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transportation
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. From an economic
perpective
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perspective
, genetically-modified
food
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 can preserve longer and
growing
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 faster than traditional crops.
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 means that we can keep the
food
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freshness
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 and increase the supply.
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trend
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also
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 has some disadvantages. One major drawback is the increase in emissions, which contributes to global warming. Nowadays, many fresh foods and other products need to be delivered by
airplanes
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aeroplanes
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 and ships. Both of these
transportation
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 methods produce a large amount of carbon emissions, which can seriously harm the environment.
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, the growing demand for fast delivery encourages excessive
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,
further
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 increasing energy consumption.
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, technological convenience may come at the cost of environmental sustainability. In
conculsion
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conclusion
,
although
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 the
trend
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also
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have
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has
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 some
disvantages
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disadvantages
 and drawbacks, the
benefits
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 of the
trend
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are
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still outweigh
than
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apply
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these drawbacks.

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coherence
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grammar
Fix grammar and spelling so the message is clear, and use basic words correctly.
lexical
Choose words carefully and keep to simple, correct language to avoid wrong word use.
task
The essay shows a clear view that benefits may be bigger than the drawbacks.
coherence
There is a plan with a start, middle, and end.
progress
Some sentences are easy to read and ideas are easy to follow.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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