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Writing Samples
Band 4

Although you have never formally studied computing, you have always been interested in computers. You have just read about a computer course that really interests you, but it is only for people who have completed an elementary course. Write a letter to the college enrolment officer. In your letter explain why you are writing describe your circumstances ask if a special exception can be made for you so you can enrol in the course You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear

Dear enrolment officer, I am writing the present letter to inquire about some of the requirements necessary to
enroll
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to
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 the computer course that will start in July. As I was always interested in computers, and I have begun using them from a young age, I would ask if it is possible to
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 me from having the elementary course stated as a requirement. I would
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 like to assure that my
computers
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 skills are superior to basic elementary level.
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, my budget does not allow me to follow the necessary course.
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 I am eager to learn more about
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 subject
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 being able to attend the one that I am interested in
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 would be a great achievement. In the attend of your answer, please accept my warm gratitude. Best regards, Andrea

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structure
Plan the letter: say why you write, what you want, and then ask for a special rule.
grammar
Use easy words. Use 'enroll in' instead of 'enroll to'.
coherence
Break the text into 2 or 3 short parts. Each part has one idea.
mechanics
Check spelling and form of the 'Dear' line and the closing.
content
The letter shows the wish to learn about the course.
tone
The tone is polite and kind.
content
The writer mentions money as a block, which is honest and clear.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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