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Writing Samples
Band 1

Some people believe law changes human behaviour. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some individuals
belive
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 law changes human
behiviour
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behaviour
. From my perspective, I totally
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agreed
 with the
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statement
and
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, and
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humans
 are naturally
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corrupted
and
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, and
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 law can
be
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apply
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change
people
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people's
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 behaviour. Many
peoeple
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people
belive
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 that
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approch
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approach
 offers
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several
 practical
adavantages
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advantages
, especially in terms of personal
developement
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development
 and
long term
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 success.
one
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 key
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benefit
 is that it helps individuals gain valuable skills and knowledge
thta
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that
 are useful in
sociaty
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society
.
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,
this
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 option can improve confidence and
decision making
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 abilities
which
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 are essential in
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modern
 society.
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, others
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argue
 that
this
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 view overlooks
certian
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certain
 drawbacks that cannot be
ignoured
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ignored
.
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,
It
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it
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 may create additional pressure
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and limite
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limite
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limit
 opportunities for some
group
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groups
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 of people. Despite these concerns, I
belive
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 that
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the advantage
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advantage
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advantages
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claerly outweight
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clearly outweigh
 the disadvantages.
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because
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conclusion
,

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language
Fix spelling and grammar so ideas are clear.
structure
Make a clear plan and put a topic sentence in each paragraph.
content
Add one or two specific examples to support points.
coherence
Use simple linking words to connect ideas.
stance
The writer shows a personal view on the issue.
content
Some ideas on the benefits and harms are noted.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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