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A magazine wants to include contribution from its readers for an article called 'the book that influenced me most". Write a letter to the editor of the magazine about the book that influences you most. In your letter, •describe what this book was about, •explain how this book influenced you, •say whether this book would be likely to influence other people

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my
intrest
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interest
 in contributing towards your upcoming article called '
the
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The Book That Influenced Me Most
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book
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 that influenced me most', which is The Atomic Habits by James Clear. It is one of the most inspirational books I have read
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 I would appreciate it if you publish it in your magazine. The main focus of
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 publication is to replace bad habits with good ones by following simple strategic rules. In
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, the author has
emphasized
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 the concept
of
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 improving only 1% of our daily routine can lead to a massive change over the period,
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 of an
immidiate
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immediate
 change. After reading
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book
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, I
immidiately
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immediately
 implemented the learnings from
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book
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, and
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, I was able to overcome my toxic traits
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 as procrastination, staying
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 bed even after I wake up, and eating
fast-foods
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fast food
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. The concept of tiny changes
lead
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leads
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 to big over-time
achievements
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achievements,
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felt
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 like not actually doing anything, but still can have the visible
sucess
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success
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apply
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time. I would highly recommend
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book
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 to anyone who
are
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is
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 struggling to quit their bad habits, and Gen-Z people would definitely find
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influencial
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influential
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, I would request you to publish my thoughts about
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book
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 in your article. Yours faithfully, Ketul Shah

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language
Fix small spell and word mistakes like intrest, immidiate, influencial and use simple, correct form.
structure
Make three short parts: intro about the book, how it helped you, and if it can help others. Try one idea in each part.
coherence
Use clear links like and, then, also so it reads easy.
tone
Keep a polite and formal tone and avoid slang.
greeting closing
Good start with Dear Sir or Madam and a close with Yours faithfully.
content
You give a real example of how the book changed you.
structure
The plan is clear: book, effect, and if it may help others.
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