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Band 3

In many countries, people prefer to use private cars rather than public transportation. What are the advantages and disadvantages of using private cars compared to public transport?

In
this
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 fast-evolving world, urbanisation has intensified the competition among individuals to achieve
standard
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a standard
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living
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of living
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. People are more likely
use
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to use
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 personal vehicles rather than public vehicles for transportation. In
this
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 essay, I will explore the merits and drawbacks of
this
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 circumstance. On the one hand, in today's competitive society, people often strive to earn money, leading them to work additional hours. If they own a personal vehicle, it would ease their accessibility to
workplace
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the workplace
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, at any preferred time.
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, if a child
get
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gets
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 sick
in
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apply
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a midnight
time
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apply
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, a parent with a car
,
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apply
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 can quickly take him to a nearby hospital rather than delaying the time.
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, nowadays, the cost of vehicles
are
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is
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 skyrocketing. Not everyone
are
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is
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 capable of owning private cars.
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, for some rural destinations, public transportation
such
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 as buses and trains
,
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apply
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are
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is
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 unavailable.
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, people have to face diverse problems
including
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, including
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delaying
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delays
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to reach
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in reaching
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 their office, and
also
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costs
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incur
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 heaps of money for taxi services.
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, if an individual missed a bus, and if the next
arrives
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bus arrives
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 after
few
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a few
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 hours, it may affect their productivity
of
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for
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 the day. In conclusion, in
this
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 modern era, the advantages of having a personal car outweigh its drawbacks. To successfully achieve the productivity of a person,
its
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it's
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 worthwhile to own a private vehicle.

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balance
Balance: add more on the bad side of cars and how public transport can fix issues.
grammar
Grammar and form: fix verb errors and plural usage.
structure
Start each paragraph with a clear topic sentence to guide the reader.
examples
Use more examples or small numbers to make points stronger.
strength
Clear stance and end view.
cohesion
Good use of 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand' to show both sides.
clarity
Easy to read and well ordered.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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