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The graph gives information about male and female gym memberships between 1980 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph gives information about male and female gym memberships between 1980 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates details about male and female gym
memeberships
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memberships
 between 1980 and 2010.
Overall
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,
Mens
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men's
 attendance shows
significantly
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significant
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 variation,
while
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female
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women
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has
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have
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considerable
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a considerable
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 change over the period of time.
However
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 number of male
participents
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participants
 at below 1000 in
2010
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2010,
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its
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it's
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 a
lager
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larger
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 portion of reduction when compared
of
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to
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 2000 members in 1980. In 1980,
Number
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the Number
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 of female
registred
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registered
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 stood
in
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at
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 1000
but
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, but
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 after
the
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apply
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1990
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1990,
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 they
reach
Wrong verb form
reached
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 2000
registration
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registrations
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and
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, and
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the
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apply
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they
keep
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kept
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 that amount between 2000 to 3000 before
start
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starting to
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 decline in 2010.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
male
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, male
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memebers represnetd
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members represented
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the lagest
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lagest
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largest
 share in
2005
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2005,
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reach
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reaching
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peak
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a peak
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about
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of about
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 5000 before falling.
In contrast
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,
Its
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It's
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 clear that most women started to
joined
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join
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gym
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the gym
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 between 1990 to 2000
..
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrollment
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • steady increase
  • pronounced difference
  • converge
  • diverge
  • membership rate
  • significant growth
  • slump
  • dominant trend
  • predominantly
  • consistent pattern
  • noteworthy
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