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Writing Samples
Band 6

The graph and chart below give information about migration to the UK from 2000 to 2008 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The given line graph illustrates the number of
years
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 that immigrants intended to stay in the UK between 2000 and 2008,
the
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and the
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 pie chart demonstrates the percentages of 5 different reasons for migration in 2008.
Overall
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, the majority of the citizens decided to stay up to 2
years
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 and witnessed a steady increase from 2000 to 2004, whether the intended length of 2 to 4
years
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and
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or
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 4 or more
years
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are
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is
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 roughly unchanged during
this
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 8-year period. In
details
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detail
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,
apparently
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apply
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it can be seen that immigrants who intended period of occupying up to 2
years
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 experienced a growth from 150 in 2000 to 250 in 2004 before its
stabilization
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stabilisation
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 in 2004
,
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;
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 there
was
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were
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 no distinct fluctuations
of
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in
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 the other 2 categories, hovering around 50 and 150.
On the other hand
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, the mainstream of
the
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apply
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reason for
migrtion
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migration
 is work, for 38
percent
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per cent
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. Study and Accompany/Join Family registered 32% and 16% respectively,
other
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others
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 and no reason stated both owned 7
percent
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per cent
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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