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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, they think that other types of progress are equality important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.TASK2

The
economy
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 is one of the most significant aspects for
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governments
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. Generally, politicians come up with economic promises to impress citizens.
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, some groups of individuals rejected the government’s promises and came up with an opinion which argues that the
economy
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 shouldn’t be the most significant thing for the government.
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, these groups support ideas like equality, justice and social
life
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 more than economic status. First of all, a qualified
life
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 is not possible without a great
economy
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. It’s clear that
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 the percentage of satisfied citizens in countries which have great economic conditions is higher than the countries which are not that developed in economic terms.
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, the
economy
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 is not enough to provide for every need by itself. A great
economy
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 needs to come with a high quality of
life
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 to provide a great
life
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 to citizens.
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, all
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governments
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 should support
concepts
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such
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 as justice, equality, human rights and ethical values to make social
life
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 more organised and meaningful. If
governments
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 don’t focus on
concepts
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 that need to be applied in social
life
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, they can’t be successful in their economic goals.
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, most investors and exclusive brands ignore countries that can’t provide the required
concepts
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 in social
life
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 when they invest.
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, Saudi Arabia had a huge project which aimed
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modern city in the desert.
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, they couldn’t gather enough investment because of the
life
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standarts
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standards
 and suspicious situations in their country.
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, the
economy
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 is expressive when it’s combined with the
concepts
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 that improve
life
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 quality. In my estimation, all
governments
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 should focus on all these factors equally to provide a better
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life
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structure
Plan your essay. Start with a short view of both sides, then give your own view. Finish with a brief end.
coherence
Use clear topic sentences for each paragraph. This helps with order and flow.
grammar
Check grammar and rules. For example, use 'equally' not 'equality', 'great economy' could be 'a strong economy' and 'quality of life' as 'quality of life'.
lexical
Keep words simple. Use common words from the top 100. Avoid long and fancy phrases.
task
Give one or two clear examples that support your point, and explain how they show your idea.
response
You show both sides and give your own view clearly.
coherence
You link economy with quality of life, which is good for task response.
coherence
You use some good transitions to move from one idea to next.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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