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Some people think that newspapers are the best way to learn news. However, others believe that they can learn news better through other medias. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

The landscape of journalism has undergone a seismic shift in the 21st century, transitioning from the traditional dominance of
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 to the instantaneity of the digital age.
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 some purists argue that
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 remain the superior medium for consuming
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 their editorial integrity, others contend that online platforms and broadcast
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 offer a more effective means of staying informed. In my view,
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newspapers
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 provide unmatched depth and reliability, the immediacy and accessibility of modern digital
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 make them the superior choice for the contemporary
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 consumer. Proponents of
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 highlight the rigorous editorial standards and analytical depth that
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 typically provide. Unlike the fragmented, often
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 soundbites found on social
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, established
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 employ professional journalists who adhere to strict codes of ethics.
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 gatekeeping function ensures that information is verified before publication, thereby filtering out the "fake
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" and misinformation that plagues unregulated online spaces.
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, the format of a newspaper encourages sustained reading. An in-depth investigative article allows for the nuance and context necessary to fully understand complex geopolitical or economic issues,
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 digital formats often
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 brevity over substance.
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, those who
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 other
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 forms—
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 websites, television, and social networking platforms—argue that
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 is obsolete in a world that operates in real-time. The primary advantage of digital
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 is speed; breaking
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 is disseminated globally seconds after an event occurs,
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newspapers
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 are inherently limited by their daily or weekly
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 cycles.
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, digital
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 is far more engaging and accessible. Through the use of multimedia—
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 as video footage, infographics, and live streams—audiences can witness history as it unfolds.
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, the interactive nature of the internet allows for a diversity of perspectives; a reader is not limited to the worldview of a single editor but can
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 compare reports from international sources instantaneously. In my opinion,
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 the intellectual discipline and credibility of
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 are invaluable, they are no longer the "best" way to learn
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 for the majority of people. The modern world is defined by rapid change, and the delay inherent in
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renders it often
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 outdated by the time it reaches the reader.
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, the convenience of having
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 curated on mobile devices allows individuals to stay informed despite busy schedules, a flexibility that
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 cannot match. In conclusion,
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 offer a level of credibility and analytical depth
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 often lacking in the digital sphere.
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, I believe that other
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 forms are ultimately better for learning
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 because they provide the immediacy, accessibility, and diverse multimedia content required to navigate the complexities of the modern world.

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task
For task response, answer the task well. Say both sides and give your own view clearly. Add a real fact or example to back a point.
coherence
For coherence, group ideas in each paragraph with one main idea. Use clear links like first, also, but, so to move ideas.
content
Clear view on the issue.
structure
Well built intro and ending.
coherence
Good links and relation of ideas.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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