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Band 6.5

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and the pie chart illustrate data on the police budget for
two
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the two
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 years 2017 and 2018 in one area of England, Wales and Scotland. The table displays where the
money
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 came from and the chart percent how it was distributed.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 in both periods the national government has given the most
money
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.
On the other hand
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, the police spend the
money
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 more
in
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on
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the
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apply
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salaries for the officers and
stuff
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staff
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. In
details
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detail
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, it is shown that the
police
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police's
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 highest budget has
came
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come
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 from the national government with 175.5m in 2017 and 177.8m in 2018. Meanwhile, the lowest was the
money
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 from the local taxes with 91.2m in 2017 and 102.3m in
2018
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2018,
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 though it is noticeable that the budget has increased in 2018.
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, the biggest
money
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 spent was in salaries for 2017 at 75% followed
bya
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by a
 slight drop in 2018 at almost 70%
while
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 Technology has a
significantly rose
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starting
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, starting
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 with just under 10% in 2018,
endding
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ending
 at 14% in 2018
then
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 the buildings and transport remained steady at 17% in both years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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