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The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from January to June

The line graph illustrates requests for data at a foreign office in the UK from
Jan
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January
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 to June.
Overall
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, the information requested in person and by telephone has increased significantly over the period
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while
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, while
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,
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apply
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 the info requested by letter/email has declined slightly month by month. In detail,
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It
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it
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 is clear that people asking for data in person in the United Kingdom tourist office have dramatically grown
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, starthing
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starthing
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starting
 at just over four hundred in January to just below 2000 in June.
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, people who asked for data by
phones
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phone
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rise
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rose
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 in
Jan
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January
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 at just over 800
but
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, but
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 it was followed by a slight drop in
Feb
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February
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 at 800
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then
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, then
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 started to grow steadily to approximately 1900.
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, men and women using letter of email to communicate with the office have decreased
with
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apply
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a
start
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starting
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 at just under 8 hundred in January
to
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, to
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 just under 400 in May
then
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 it remained stable till June.

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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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