In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers and books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or diasgree with this statement.

It is argued that in the upcoming years nobody will purchase
newspaper
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and books because there are gonna be able to read
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news
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the news
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over
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on
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their gadgets. I completely agree with
this
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statement because
its
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it's
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free and easy to find
information
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, unlike
newspapers
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,
they
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which
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are complicated and full of
unnessesary
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unnecessary
information
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.
Firstly
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, in
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2030,
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most individuals are focusing on AI and technology, which makes everything available on the
internet
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, like
newspapers
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and articles. There are
alot
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a lot
of old school people who think the
internet
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is useless,
therefore
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they buy the old, regular printed
newspapers
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.
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, people now are using the
internet
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more than anything, so they find the
information
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they are looking for
on
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in
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newspapers
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easily on their devices, unlike
others
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others,
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they
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who
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are gonna keep searching for the
information
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they need
by
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with
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their eyes.
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this
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reason
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reason,
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i
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I
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believe using devices for
news
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is much more effortless and will not take time.
Secondly
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,
newspapers
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are inexpensive
,
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;
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however
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however,
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alot
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a lot
of
humans
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people
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refuse to purchase the printed papers because they can find the details
in
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on
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some
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a
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website on their phones, so they believe it's a waste of money and time.
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, an individual with a short amount of cash
,
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apply
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went and purchased the papers so he could catch the latest updates
but
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, but
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instead
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instead,
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he was not satisfied
nor
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or
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updated
,
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. Then
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then
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then,
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he went
on
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to
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a random
pdf
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PDF
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he found on Google and got the updates he wanted without any cash given.
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this
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reason
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reason,
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using gadgets for
news
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is free and
straight-forward
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straightforward
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. In conclusion, I believe
recieving
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receiving
news
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online is much better for our generation and future.
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However
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some believe that we should still purchase
newspapers
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and read them
instead
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of taking brief
information
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from the
internet
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.

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overall
Overall score: 5. The essay has a clear idea and a simple plan, but many grammar and word use errors make it hard. Use correct grammar, short sentences, and simple linking words.
task response
Task response: You say you agree, but you should show more depth. Add a fair view or a counter idea and give clear reasons.
coherence
Coherence: Make one idea in each paragraph. Start with a topic sentence. Use words that link ideas, like 'and', 'but', 'so'.
structure
Intro shows your stance and plan.
language
There are clear sign words like 'Firstly' and 'Secondly'.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • online
  • print
  • newspaper
  • book
  • read
  • free
  • pay
  • price
  • cost
  • access
  • library
  • internet
  • screen
  • eye
  • habit
  • comfort
  • convenient
  • trust
  • quality
  • focus
  • memory
  • archive
  • up-to-date
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