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Nowadays more and more tasks at home and at work are being performed by robots. Why do you think it’s happening? Is it a negative or positive development?

Currently, numerous
houseworks
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housework
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tasks and
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tasks in the workplace are being performed by
robots
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. It is happening because of the trend of
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technologies
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 innovation that
make
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people's working patterns change. In my opinion, the development
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 the trend is positive for the people.
In recently
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, the
sophiscated
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sophisticated
 and multi-functional robot has
introdued
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 and
influence
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influenced
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 the working
behavior
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to
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humanity.
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, in 2018, a
tech-company
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 in Japan
which is
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focus
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focuses
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 on
produce
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producing
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 high-performance
robots
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restaurants
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restaurant
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 service and
houseworks
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housework
 orientation. The company
took
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a
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research which
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about
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the
reason
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reasons
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of
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why
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customer
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customers
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 are willing to adopt
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robot
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robots
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 to complete the tasks assigned. In the research, the restaurant employers reflect that the
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robots
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robots'
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 reliable performance
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elevate
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elevates
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 the service
qualities
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quality
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 and
reduce
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reduces
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 the cost for employees.
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, the houseworker mentioned that they are able to engage
other
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with other
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 issues
under
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 the robot's help. It is undeniable
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development
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the development
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 of
robots
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 which cover
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works
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work
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 at home and in workplaces may impact
self-confidences
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self-confidence
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 and
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job opportunities
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for
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humanity.
However
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, the merit is tremendous and visible. For
houseworker
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houseworkers
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, they
are
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no longer
to
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need to
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 feel anxious about the endless
houseworks
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housework
. For
company
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the company
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, the employers are able to
maximize
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 the profit and accelerate the service efficiency for stakeholders and customers. In conclusion,
robots
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 which engage the tasks at home and in the
work
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workplace
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 should not be
view
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viewed
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 as negative development.
On the contrary
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,
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it
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 should be
regard
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regarded
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 as a positive trend for
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humanity.

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content
The essay gives a clear view that robots can help, but it needs balance. Add a short note on possible negative points.
grammar
Fix grammar and spelling. Use correct word forms. For example: 'housework' (not 'houseworks'), 'introduced' (not 'introdued').
structure
Use a simple plan: intro, two body paragraphs, conclusion. Start each paragraph with a clear topic sentence.
coherence
Link ideas with small words to show flow: also, but, and, then. This helps the reader move through the idea.
content
Check the facts and use simple, true details. If you mention a date or company, make it clear and correct.
content
The writer shows a clear view that robots bring benefit to life at home and work.
content
An example is used to support the idea.
structure
The ending restates the main idea.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • robotics
  • automation
  • revolutionized
  • industries 4.0
  • mundane
  • intricate tasks
  • technological advancement
  • accessible
  • efficiency
  • precision
  • economic factors
  • labor costs
  • dependency
  • quality of life
  • creative
  • strategic
  • interpersonal tasks
  • innovation
  • job opportunities
  • job displacement
  • digital divide
  • marginalized
  • environmental impact
  • disposal
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