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You are being sent on a one month work assignment in San Francisco, California. You need a place to stay while you are there. Write a letter to the Maury Samson Real Estate Agency. In your letter: explain the situation describe the kind of accommodation you would like provide the dates you will need it Begin your letter as follows: Dear Mr Samson,

Dear Mr Samson, I hope
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 letter finds you well. I am writing
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 to request
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an accommodation during my stay in San Francisco, California
for
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one
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month
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of
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work assignment I'm assigned to. Being a
canadian
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, I have never visited
The
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 United States because
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which
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I have no friends and family over there
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, its a quite
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challenging to look for a home to stay.
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, I would not be able to afford it
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even
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 if I could find one. I would like to request
you
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to
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provide me with an accommodation. I would appreciate it if
its
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 located in a peaceful and safe neighbourhood with no housemates or roommates as I would be concentrating on my work only,
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,
i
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 want no disturbance. I will be flying there on June 2nd,
Tuesday
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at 1:00pm
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 most probably I
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 reach there at 6:30pm and will be there until June 3rd.
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, kindly look for a place to live by
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. I sincerely appreciate your help and assistance. Yours faithfully, Manveet Kaur

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structure
Try to get one main idea in each paragraph and use short, simple sentences.
content
Make dates clear and fit the plan, like staying for one month.
grammar
Check big words and capitals (Canadian, United States) and use a date that fits the stay.
tone
Keep a formal and polite tone.
tone
Polite tone and good closing.
content
Gives the main request and the dates.
format
Uses a formal start with Dear and a courteous sign off.
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