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Band 4.5

Environmental problems are too big for individual countries or individual people to address. In other words,we have reached the stage where the only way to protect the environment is at an international level. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In
this
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 modern era,
urbanization
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urbanisation
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 has intensified the growth of environmental pollution. Some people opine that environmental issues are difficult to
be addressed
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address
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from
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at
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a
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the
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 country
level
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, and need
the
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apply
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international support. I firmly disagree with
this
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 opinion and will explore reasons in
this
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 essay. On the one hand, in today's fast-evolving era,
industrialization
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industrialisation
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 has indirectly paved the way to elevate
the
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environmental deterioration.
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 people are aware
about
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of
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this
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these
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 current circumstances, they often remain in their
comfortable
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comfort
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 zone without taking necessary steps.
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,
increase
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the increase
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in emission
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emission
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emissions
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 of carbon dioxide from vehicles has increased
the
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global warming. But, rather than minimising the extreme vehicle usage, or
ensure
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ensuring
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 obtaining green-testing, they continue to seek
advise
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 from international leaders.
This
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 can be mainly
due to
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 the
uncertainity
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uncertainty
 towards the political and
economical
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economic
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 influences. Some countries often lack the
economy
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economic
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level
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 to promote environmental health strategies, including
installation
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the installation
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 of
seperated
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separate
 waste bins in every area of the country.
Undoutedly
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Undoubtedly
, there are diverse actions that can be taken
from
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at
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 a country
level
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, with the help of
multi-sectorial
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multi-sectoral
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colloborations
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collaborations
. Government authorities should regulate the environmental laws to penalise the environmental degradation efforts by people,
such
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 as illegal logging and deforestation. Environmental health officers should raise awareness regarding the green-friendly initiatives, and conduct regular assessments to check the safety emissions from factories.
Although
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 there are
global
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global-level
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level
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 effects
such
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 as global warming, it should first start to address
from
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at
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individual
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the individual
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level
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. In conclusion, despite having some negligible factors
such
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 as political and
economical
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 influences, a whole-of-government and whole-of-society
approaches
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approach
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 can address the environmental problems.
Instead
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 of seeking international help, nations by themselves have the
potency
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potential
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 to safeguard the environment, and protect it
to
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for
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the
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apply
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future
generation
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generations
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.

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task response
Make your idea clear at once. State if you agree or disagree at the start and restate it at the end.
coherence
Each paragraph should have one main idea. Use links to show how ideas go together.
content
Give more detail for each point. Use real examples or data to back up what you say.
grammar vocabulary
Check spell and grammar. Use short, simple words and sentences to avoid mistakes.
stance
The writer has a clear stance that countries can act on their own.
content
There is effort to explain actions a country can take.
structure
The essay follows a plan with intro, two body paragraphs and a conclusion.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environment
  • problems
  • countries
  • people
  • address
  • protect
  • international
  • climate
  • change
  • pollution
  • resources
  • technology
  • cooperation
  • support
  • knowledge
  • solutions
  • reducing
  • carbon
  • emissions
  • protecting
  • oceans
  • agreements
  • efforts
  • impact
  • strategy
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