Women are better at childcare than men therefore they should focus more on raising chilren and less on teir working life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Many people believe that
woman
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are better at childcare than men,
therefore
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fathers should focus more on raising children and less on
teir
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their
working life.
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this
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trend might be
due to
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changes in child-parent relationships and support. I partly agree with
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both of them need to care about children.

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structure
Start with a short intro that states your view.
development
Make each idea with a small reason and one example, to show you understand.
grammar
Use full sentences, not cut parts.
coherence
Use simple link words to show how ideas are linked.
task response
The writer shows a clear view.
coherence
Some balance is tried by mentioning both sides.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • childcare
  • parents
  • agree
  • disagree
  • partly
  • balance
  • work
  • job
  • career
  • family
  • parent
  • mother
  • father
  • share
  • time
  • policy
  • leave
  • child
  • school
  • care
  • help
  • equal
  • culture
  • society
  • cost
  • benefit
  • flexible
  • support
  • opinion
  • role
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