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Band 1

Earlier technological developments brought more benefits and changed the lives of ordinary people more than recent technological developments. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, many
people
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 believe that earlier technological developments brought more benefits and changed
the
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their
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 lives ,
while
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 ordinary
people
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more
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are more
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 than recent technological developments.
This
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 issue has become increasingly important in modern society. In my opinion, recent technological developments
brought
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have brought
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 more benefits and changed the lives, and
this
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 essay will explain the reasons for
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 view. One of the main reasons is that for me
AI
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, AI
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 and electric
car
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cars
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.
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 means that
Ai
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AI
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 know everything and
help
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helps
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people
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every
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with every
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 topic
, electric
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. Electric
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car
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cars
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doesn't
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don't
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 use fossil
fuels
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fuels,
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i
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I
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 think it is the best thing.
As a
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result
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people
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 improve
yourself
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themselves
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, save money
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, couse
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couse
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and
 learn everything
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this
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through this
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 development.
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,
i
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I
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 want to learn
english
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English
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and
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, and
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i
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I
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dont
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don't
 want
spend
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to spend
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 money
, i
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. I
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dont
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don't
 have time
so
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, so
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i
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I
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 need free time
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, but
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chatgtp
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ChatGPT
 or
gemini ai
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Gemini AI
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teach
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teaches
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 everything anytime
i
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I
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 want.
Therefor
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Therefore
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,
this
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 factor plays
on
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an
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 important role.

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structure
Make a clear plan with three parts: intro, body, and end.
coherence
Put ideas in order. Use small links like and, but, so.
content
Explain one main reason well and give a clear example.
grammar
Check grammar. Use simple, correct sentences.
content
Use more examples that fit the question, like how AI helps in daily life.
strength
The writer states a view clearly.
strength
There is a real example about AI and eco cars.
strength
The topic is kept in simple form.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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