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Band 3.5

Some prefer to live in big cities while others prefer small towns. Give your opinion

There is always a debate over whether living in a big
city
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 is better or a small town. In my opinion, urban
life
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 is appropriate for those who love nature and peace and a slow pace of
life
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. There are living in a
city
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 is safer,
strong
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a strong
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 community,
peaceful
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a peaceful
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 atmosphere, if you want to take care of your health, fresh air can’t be
problem
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a problem
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and
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, and
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 you feel more connected to the community around you. In one word, retired and old people prefer to live in
country
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the countryside
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life
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.
On the other hand
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, big cities have their own advantages. If you are ambitious or looking for career opportunities, cities can offer a range of jobs, education and entertainment facilities. There are a variety of access from hospitals to shopping
centers
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centres
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 for people. Personally, I prefer to live in a small town because I love
slow
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the slow
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 pace of
life
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 and
also
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 outdoor activities like cycling and walking around green gardens.
In addition
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 to
this
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, taking care of animals, especially chickens, is my favourite hobby. That said, I understand why some people choose to live
city
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life
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life,
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 as it can give study and job opportunities. In conclusion, it depends on individuals’
preference
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preferences
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 to
accommodate
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live
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 in a
city
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 or
small
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a small
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 town. If you are eager to ambitious, you are welcome to urban
life
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. Peace and nature lovers can live in rural areas if they want.

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structure
Make one clear plan. Intro, two body parts, and a short ending.
grammar
Use short, clear sentences. Check grammar and fix errors.
cohesion
Use simple linking words like also, but, and because to connect ideas.
content
Give one or two real examples from life to show your idea.
layout
The essay tries to cover both sides of the topic.
content
There is a clear view now and then.
structure
There is a conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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