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The graph below shows the average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.”

The line graph demonstrates the
changes
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 that happened in
price
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 every
month
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 in 2014 in three types of metals: copper,
nickel
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 and zinc.
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, the
price
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 of
nickel
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 started high but decreased rapidly and did not increase. Cooper and zinc were at the same level and experienced
changes
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 over the period. The
price
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 of
nickel
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 started with 6% in
january
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January
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.
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, decreased sharply to 1% in
march
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March
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 and
stable remained
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remained stable
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 in
april
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April
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 with
this
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 figure. In
may
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May
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,
this
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it
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apply
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fell a little to 0,85%. By
june
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June
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, the
cost
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 of
nickel
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 decreased rapidly to -3% but next
month
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 increased to -1%. Until
seprember
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September
, it was
same
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the same
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and
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, and
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 in
this
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month
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 showed a minor decrease (-2%).  After
may
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May
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the
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, the
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cost
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 reached 1% and did not experience
changes
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.  The
price
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 of zinc increased
to
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by
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 3% in
february
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February
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.
Then
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, it had been decreasing until
june
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June
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to
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by
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 -1%. The
cost
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 had been remaining stable for five
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month
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months
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 at around -1%. Since
october
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October
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, it
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has inresed
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inresed
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increased
 to 2%. The
cost
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 of
coopper
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copper
 had been decreasing from 2%&nbsp
;
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apply
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 to 0.75% until
june
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June
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.
Then
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, it increased to 1%
and&nbsp
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and
;
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apply
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had not
experineced
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experienced
changes
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 for three
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month
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months
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. In
october
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October
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 and
november
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November
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, it fell a little to 0.75% and increased in
december
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December
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 to 1.2%. 

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Vocabulary: Replace the words changes, price, month, nickel, cost with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
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