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some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign languge. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

There is a debate in which
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 of
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belive
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 that a different
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 should only be learned when the
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purpose
 is
travel
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 or
work
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, some others believe that those
reasons
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 are not the only valid ones.
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 why there
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 more valid
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 to learn a new
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. On the first hand,
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 who
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 that
travel
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 or
work
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 are the only main
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 to learn a
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 might find the process of learning tricky or difficult. Some
people
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this kind
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 of topics.
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, some
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people
 might find cultural or
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historical processes
 as key subjects of learning and do not rely only on
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 or
travel
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 as the only viable
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 to learn a different tongue. Life is not only about
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profession
 or pleasure,
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is
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 a
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infinitely
 more interesting things
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to learn, like hobbies or even just curiosity. In my opinion, I agree that we should not limit our
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lives
 to just two minor things
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 as our
proffesional lifes
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professional lives
 or our trips to other countries. We should expand our bonds not only by the meaning of
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travel
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, but
also
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 by the wonderful things that we are passionate about. For many
people
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, life is full of questions and wonders that we should investigate, and that
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compleatly
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completely
 respectable.
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, despite some
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thinks
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work
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 or
travel
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as
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 the only
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reasons
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 to learns an
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 new culture
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 the
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, I do not agree and prefer the view on more options than
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structure
Make a plan before you write: intro, two body parts, and a clear end.
coherence
Use links when you move from one idea to the next: first, also, but, for example.
grammar
Check spell and grammar. Common errors like purpuse, proffession, infintite, and other simple slips.
task response
State your view clearly in the end and keep ideas simple.
content
You try to discuss both sides and give a view.
structure
There is a clear plan with intro, body, and end.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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