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Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and shouldbe outlawed.However,others believe that important scientific discoveriescan be made from animal experiments. Can experimentation on animals be justified?Are there any alternatives?

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expertimentation
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experimentation
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necessary
,ethical or not has been there for many decades.
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experimentation on
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 can be justified,I tend to believe that it can not be,and there are
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experiment
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experiments
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animals
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animals
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 and
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humans
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.Founded by the first doctor who decided to do
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experiment
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experiments
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animals
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,the method
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experiment
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 conditions of the
animals
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,which
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believable
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 on paper--a poison would make a
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rabbit
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 bodies in the future,
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necessary
. The other reason is more direct and
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economical
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-profit rate.As all people pay attention to,how much
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we pay out is the basic direction for almost all
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decisions
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justified,we have to do
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logical
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calculations
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need much more pay
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opposite
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contrary
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days -time
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actually
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believable
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profitble
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profitable
 at all. In total,the animal experiments
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 lives,which have to promise about the level of belive and
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-profit rate.The method for
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task
State your view clearly in the first paragraph and keep one main idea per paragraph.
coherence
Plan with a short outline before you write. Use linking words to move ideas.
task
Explain the reasons with simple facts or examples, not just ideas.
content
The topic is clear and the writer tries to argue.
strength
There is some attempt to use examples like cost and benefit.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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