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The graph below shows the quantities of good transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.

The line graph shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK from 1974 to 2002 by four different
types
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Change preposition
of mode
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mode
Fix the agreement mistake
modes
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 of transportation,
such
Linking Words
 as
;
Punctuation problem
apply
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 Road,
Water
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,
Rail
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, and Pipeline.
Linking Words
Overall
Punctuation problem
Overall,
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 four different
types
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 had up
and
Correct word choice
or
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 down
number
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 of million tonnes
,
Punctuation problem
;
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Linking Words
however
Punctuation problem
however,
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at the end
Linking Words
 of the
illustrates
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illustration
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 shows, from the
first
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year
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, every
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types
Fix the agreement mistake
type
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 of transportation
get
Correct subject-verb agreement
gets
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 higher than the
first
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year
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. From the
first
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year
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 until the
last
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 years of the data
shows
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show
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, Road
always
Verb problem
has always
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be
Wrong verb form
been
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 the higher
number
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 between 65 and 100 million tonnes.
Second
Correct article usage
The second
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 and third
one
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ones
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is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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Water
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 and
Rail
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, the beginning of data shows,
water
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 and
rail
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 at
same
Correct article usage
the same
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number
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 (40)
but
Punctuation problem
, but
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 one of them had
significantly
Correct article usage
a significantly
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 increased and decreased
number
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, and the other one steadily increased. 1980
Water
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 gradually increased until more than 60 million tonnes.
Futhermore
Correct your spelling
Furthermore
,
Rail
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 had
two
Correct determiner usage
a
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 times
decreased
Replace the word
decrease
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Change preposition
in number
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number
Fix the agreement mistake
numbers
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, and
get
Wrong verb form
got
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 low
two times
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twice
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,
1986
Change preposition
in 1986
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 and 1994.
Nevertheless
Linking Words
,
Rail
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go
Correct subject-verb agreement
goes
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 back to the
first
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number
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 in the
first
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year
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 of the shows. The
last
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 is pipeline,
had
Wrong verb form
which has
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 been the lowest
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types
Fix the agreement mistake
type
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 of transportation in
UK
Correct article usage
the UK
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,
however
Linking Words
 is still
increased in
Wrong verb form
increasing
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 each
year
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words types, water, rail, number, first, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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