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With the rise of remote work, companies are increasingly adopting global hiring practices, employing individuals from diverse cultural backgrounds regardless of location. What are the advantages and disadvantages of globally distributed workforces, and to what extent do you believe this trend will reshape the traditional workplace?

The changes
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tradition
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the tradition
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 of
companies
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' situations, the extent of remote work and hiring
employees
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 from different regions employing individuals from diverse cultural backgrounds
regardless
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 of area. In my opinion, I write about the advantages and disadvantages
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due to
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 several specific each of which is to be explained in detail in the following essay.
Initially
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 and foremost, in
technology
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the technology
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 era, working conditions of
companies
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 and
organizations
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organisations
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 are changing day by day, which is well for
situation
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the situation
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 of
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employees
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both employees
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 and employers
both
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apply
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.
Therefore
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 remote working system is
benefit
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beneficial
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 to
comapanies
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companies
financial
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finances
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due to
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because
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 they
should
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do
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 not
pay
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have to pay
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 office rental and office daily expenses
but
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, but
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expenses only salary
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only salary expenses
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.
Furthermore
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,
the
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apply
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one of the
beneficial
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benefits
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 of
employees
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 is that people work from their
home
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homes
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 and different regions
is
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are
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 useful for their
productive
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productivity
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of
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at
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 work.
According to
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 research
of
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by
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 Mongolian National University's Business
Adminstration
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Administration
 department, which is Mongolian bankruptcy of
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Mongolian companies
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companies
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companies'
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 were decreased by 45
percent
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per cent
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in
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over
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last
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the last
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 5 years
because of
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due to
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switch
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the switch
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into
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to
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remote
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a remote
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 working system.
However
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, it has several disadvantages
which
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, which
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 is
for
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that
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company the
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the company's
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 CEO
does
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is
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 not able to control and
require
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requires
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thier
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their
workers
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workers'
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 job activity.
For instance
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,
CEO
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the CEO
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 and managers announce the online meeting
eventhough
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even though
worker
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workers
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 join the meeting from their
bed
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beds
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 and
camping
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while camping
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.
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This
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These
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 actions
consider
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are considered
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 unfocusing on
thier
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their
 job.
In addition
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, one of the
non
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non-productive
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porductive
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aspects
 of
employees
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 is that if they stay home or other places to working, they
could not
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cannot
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 essential performances on their job
due to
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 might be
their
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that their
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 children
disturb
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might disturb
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.
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them.
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To conclude
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,
technology
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the technology
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 era and
modernazation
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modernisation
 will be changed into
different
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a different
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 situation in future
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, whereas
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whereas
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as
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companies
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 and
employees
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 develop
remote
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a remote
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 working system.

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structure
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language
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content
Explain both sides of the topic with reasons and how they affect work.
coherence
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editing
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conclusion
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content awareness
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structure
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language
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