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Money spent on space exploration is a complete waste. Governments could better spend this money on other things to benefit the nation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that money spent on
space
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exploration
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 is entirely wasted and that
governments
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 should allocate these funds to more urgent national needs.
While
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 it is true that countries face serious challenges on Earth, I strongly disagree with the view that investment in
space
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exploration
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 is pointless. Admittedly,
governments
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 must prioritise essential sectors
such
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 as healthcare, education, and poverty reduction. In many developing nations, limited public funds could arguably have a more immediate impact if they were directed towards improving living standards or building infrastructure. From
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 perspective, spending billions on
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 missions may appear unnecessary, especially when basic social needs remain unmet.
However
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,
this
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 argument overlooks the substantial long-term benefits that
space
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exploration
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 brings. Many technologies that are now essential to everyday life—
such
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 as satellite communication, GPS navigation, weather forecasting, and medical imaging—originated from
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 research. These innovations not only improve
quality
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the quality
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 of life but
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 support economic growth and national security.
Furthermore
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, investment in
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 programmes stimulates scientific research, creates high-skilled employment, and encourages young people to pursue careers in science and engineering.
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,
space
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exploration
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 plays a crucial role in addressing global challenges.
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, satellites help monitor climate change, track natural disasters, and manage natural resources more effectively. Without
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 data,
governments
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 would struggle to respond efficiently to environmental threats that directly affect their citizens. In conclusion,
although
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governments
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 should carefully balance their spending priorities, I strongly disagree that money devoted to
space
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exploration
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 is a complete waste.
On the contrary
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, it represents a strategic investment that delivers significant scientific, economic, and social benefits, both now and in the future.

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structure
Your view is clear and you give many good reasons. Keep this strong plan when you write. Make each reason tie a bit more to the main statement.
linking
Try to show even more direct links from each point to the end idea. This will make the flow very smooth.
style
Use short and plain words. Some long words are not needed. Check for small grammar slips and fix them.
content
Clear view and solid reasons.
cohesion
Good order of ideas and use of “however” and “in addition.”
closing
Strong ending that restates view.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • complete waste
  • benefit the nation
  • technological advancements
  • foster
  • international cooperation
  • inspire
  • engage
  • boost the economy
  • long-term benefits
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