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Band 3

The development of technology has resulted in more employees working from home. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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develpment
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development
 of technology in the
20
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20th
 century
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resulted in more
employee
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employees
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 working from home . In
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dnegative
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negative
impact
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 will be
discused
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discussed
. Back in the days
where
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 technology was not applied , people needed to move and walk for a long distance and
set
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sit
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 on a disk with
lots
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 of papers to
work
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 .
even
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 before 10 years from
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 the situation was the same.
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,
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 of buildings
was
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 a
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work space
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 for the employees to
achive
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achieve
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, now with
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 inflation in technology ,
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 of
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 and big
companys
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companies
 shift
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work
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 to be online and from home in any place in the world, without the need to meet in real life. There are
an
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advanatges
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advantages
 and disadvantages , and the positive things are ,
first
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 that the need
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lots
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 of buildings and
work
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 space is
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 needed
any more
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necessary
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.Second ,
employee
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employees
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 have more time to spend
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with
the
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their
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 family and
freinds
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friends
.
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the quality of the
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 is increasing
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 it
save
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saves
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 of
monye
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money
 and effort.
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, there are some disadvantages, most
improtently
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importantly
 the community now is less
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 with each other and afraid to make and start new relationships . In the end,
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work
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working
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 from home has
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lots of
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a significant
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 impact
in
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 the community and
need
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needs
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 to
study
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that
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in depth .

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task tip
Check the task and give a clear answer. State your view at once and then add two or three ideas to back it up.
structure
Make a simple plan before writing. Use three parts: short intro, one or two body paragraphs, short end.
language
Use simple grammar and short, plain sentences. Check verb forms and avoid long mistakes.
vocabulary
Use common words only. Do not mix up ideas or words. Revise for accuracy before you finish.
content
There are ideas about how home work may change space and time with family.
structure
The writer shows both good and bad sides of the topic.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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