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The line graph gives data about people who asks to gain information at the tourist offices from January to June in UK.

The given line chart provides information about the three ways ( in person, by letter or email ) that
indiviuals
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individuals
 get information from the tourist offices between
January
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 and June in the United Kingdom of Great Britain.
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 that between people, gaining information in person and by telephone is more widespread than getting it in a written form. In terms of enquiries made in person, the figure increased steadily throughout the period. It rose from approximately 450 in
January
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 to 600 in February and 800 in March.
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 growth became more significant from April, when the number reached about 1,250, before climbing
further
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 to around 1,550 in May and peaking at nearly 1,900 in June. A different pattern can be seen for the other two methods. Requests made by telephone started at about 900 in
January
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, fell slightly in February, and
then
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 increased to 1,000 in March. After remaining stable in April, the figure rose sharply to around 1,400 in May and 1,600 in June.
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, enquiries by letter or email showed a consistent decline, dropping from roughly 750 in
January
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 to around 350 by the end of the period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words january with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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