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In some place old age is valuable, while in other cultures youth is considered ,ore important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays,a considerable debate is that
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many countries give value to the
elder
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people
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,
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 others prioritise the young generation.I strongly believe that, though the elders should get the value,
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the young generation should get support and priority the most. One major reason is that
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growing
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 have the strength and courage to take any action in
critical
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 moment ,for the sake of their nation.In
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 age,the young
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 strengthen their power to gather knowledge and work for their future.They
take
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participation
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 in many
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 sectors,
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 as business or
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,to have financial stability.
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, their engagement with
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 businesses
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stimulate
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 the growth of
national
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the national
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 economy and
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 international recognition around the world.
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, the
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trust
 for new innovation
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they
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 can go so far, which can lead
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 development of a country at its finest. Another strong argument for supporting the young is that
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 to
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 a capable
learder
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leader
 for a long time.Though leadership has no age barrier, anyone at any age can make a good
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still
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 the young to
middle aged
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people
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 are considered the best for that role,as they have more bravery to take initial action.
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,the growing
people
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 play the most crucial part in the family, as new earners and supporters for others. In conclusion,as the young
people
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 are considered valuable for their family and nation, the elders,
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guild
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 them in the right path by their experience.
Moder
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civilization
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need
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needs
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 both
young
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the young
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 and
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the elder
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elder
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elderly
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 to become a great nation.

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task response
The essay asks for both views and your view. It gives more on youth. Try to show both sides well and add real examples or facts.
coherence cohesion
Make each paragraph have one idea. Begin with a small sentence that tells what the paragraph is about. Use simple joins like 'and', 'but', 'also', 'therefore'.
structure
The plan is clear: intro, two bodies, conclusion.
coherence
The idea that young people can help the nation is clear.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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