the diagram below shows how one type of coal is used to produce electricity

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manufacturing
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the manufacturing
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of electricity using coal.
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, the first process is when folks
digging
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the mine to get coal and deliver it to the coal crushers.These people are staying at the mine buildings
which
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, which
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are close by
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this
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can help them to crush coal early in the morning.
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, after they
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hauled
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these raw materials, wheelbarrows and vehicles carry coal to the process house
were
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we find many workers and
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a gassifier
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gassifier
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gasifier
.
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, gas power
plant
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plants
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were installed to sustain
making
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the production
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of
electricty
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electricity
.
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,
this
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process of making electricity from coal
need
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a cooler as well gas power plant to cool the coal.
This
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can review that the processing stages are about to finish,
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heat waste is not important.
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, after all these nine stages, electricity is produced in the tenth stage
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there is a lot of labour during
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whole
work
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process
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.
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,
this
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elecricity
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electricity
is used in their houses to cook and as a source of energy,
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others
using
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use
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it in the industrial areas.

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