The increasing demand for oil and gas has made it necessary to find these energy sources in remote locations. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Globally, there's a need for oil and
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because they are used as energy sources in many countries. It is
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necessary to mine for them. The benefits of doing
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outweigh the drawbacks. Some of the advantages are that they lead to the creation of employment and wealth. First and foremost, mining for oil and
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creates employment for citizens, especially those living locally. Certain studies reveal that companies prefer employing locals because of the favours they may get in return.
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, accommodation and food can be easily accessed if they have good relations with the locals. Another advantage is that when sold, the two energy sources may improve the country's economy, thereby leading to wealth. Countries
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Arabia have a stable economy because of the availability of
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. Mining for fuel has some disadvantages. One of them is that
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it leads to land degradation. It is noted that in some areas where they dig for sources of energy, some companies leave unburied deep pits.
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is dangerous to people and animals living nearby. In the worst situations, there have been records of wildlife and people dying from falling into the pits. Another problem is that
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digging brings out dust , which may lead to certain respiratory diseases
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as TB and lung infections. Some studies show that most miners suffer from respiratory complications. In conclusion, the high demand for oil and
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is the reason why companies look for it in remote areas. I think
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has more advantages than disadvantages.
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it creates employment, and
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it improves the country's economy.

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task
The essay talks about both good and bad points, but it ends by saying the good points are bigger. Do more fair talk. Give solid proof for each side and keep a final view that fits the essay.
structure
The links between ideas are not strong in places. Use clear topic sentences in each paragraph and more linking words to move from one idea to the next.
content
Clear talk of main idea in the first lines and a plan for the essay.
structure
Reasonable use of paragraphs and linking phrases like First and In conclusion.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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