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Writing Samples
Band 1

Some people think that paying tax is their only duty, while others believe that we have more responsibilities towards our society. Discuss both views and give your opinion. ​​​​

It is understandable that some people might regard paying tax as their only duty
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the
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society, as they expect the government to utilise their tax to build a better society. In my opinion, we can do more than that
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 we shall undertake more responsibilities.
To begin
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 with, in many
eveloping
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developing
 countries, not everyone can reach the
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minimum level of paying
taxing
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taxes
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 as some of them are paid with lower salary.
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, no matter
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 is a
tax payer
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 or not, I believe that we all have the
resposibility
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responsibility
 to protect the environment and build a better earth.
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, we can start for
ourseleves
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ourselves
 to save ecological
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,
such
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 as water and electricity, to

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task response
Add more ideas for both views and give a clear opinion.
structure
Use a clear plan: intro, two body parts for each view, then your own view, and a short ending.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas are linked.
content
The writer says tax is not the only duty.
coherence
There is some use of connect words such as however.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fiscal responsibilities
  • state's revenues
  • societal structures
  • moral and societal duties
  • community service
  • environmental sustainability
  • democratic processes
  • efficiency
  • utilizing tax revenues
  • social issues
  • redundant
  • active citizenship
  • civic engagement
  • personal and collective efforts
  • societal enhancement
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