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Writing Samples
Band 2

The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 10 words.

The two maps compare the Porth Harbour in 2000 and
today’s
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its
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 condition
.
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today.
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Overall
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, there are a lot of changes in building and land use
for
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in
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 certain
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area
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areas
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 over time. Nowadays, the
Porth
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Port
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 Harbour has extended the dock
area
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, so
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 it can afford more boats in each dock.
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, the
area
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 of
public
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the public
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 beach still similar over time. On the
left hand
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left-hand
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 side, there is a place for fishing boats that have been moved and changed from the
area
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besides
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beside
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its
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it
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.
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, both for showers & toilets and
car
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the car
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 park remain the same, near the main road.
On
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In
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 the southern
area
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, Harbour adds new showers & toilets beside the car park.
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,
in
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on
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left
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the left
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side
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 there are so many
changing
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changes
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happen
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happening
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.
Firstly
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, the cafes & shops have been established beside
lifeboat
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the lifeboat
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area
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, at the corner of
land
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the land
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. Another road is
also
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 added, connecting the other road to the hotel,
while
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 the hotel
have
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has
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 been changed from
castle
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a castle
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, either. After that, the public beach
become
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became
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 the private beach,
owning
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owned
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 by the hotel.

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Your task response needs a clearer overview and more exact facts from both maps.
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Organize ideas: first describe the old map, then the new map, and use clear links like 'in addition', 'however', and 'for example'.
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Fix grammar and word use. Use simple past tense for changes: 'was', 'became', 'were built'.
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Check the use of left/right sides and keep a steady order to avoid mix up.
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You do try to show what changed to the harbor area.
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You name a few new or kept features, like docks and car park.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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