The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first table illustrates changes in the total
population
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of NYC from the
year
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18s to 20s. The second and third tables display changes in the
population
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of five
districts
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of the city
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Manhattan
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, Manhattan
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, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens and Staten Island over the
excat
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exact
period.
Overall
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, as it
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shows
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showen,
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it is clear that
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the highest number of people living in New York City in all five
districts
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was in 2000,
while
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the lowest was in 1800. Meanwhile, in
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Manhattan
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Manhattan,
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the
percentage
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was the biggest
but
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, but
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it declined over the years,
while
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in the other
districts
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have
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it has
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increased dramatically
year
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by
year
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. In detail, the
population
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in New York City
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had
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reached just under 80,000 in the
year
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1800.
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Furthermore
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it was followed by a
sharped
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increas
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increase
in 1900 at just below 3 and
half
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a half
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milions
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million
,
while
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in the
year
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2000 it
have
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had
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become the highest amount at just above 8
milion
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million
.
On the other hand
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,
Manhattan
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in 1800
took
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had
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the largest
percentage
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of the total
population
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at 75%,
while
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all the other
districts
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left were
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had
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the smallest
percentage
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of the
overall
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population
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.
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Moreover
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that has changed over the years
and
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, and
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in
2000
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2000,
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the
percentage
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in Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens and Staten Island
were
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was
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81%,
while
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Manhattan
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was just under 20% of the total number of people living there.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, year, districts, manhattan, percentage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • people
  • city
  • five
  • district
  • grow
  • growth
  • rise
  • increase
  • increase
  • rise
  • fall
  • decline
  • high
  • low
  • big
  • large
  • small
  • more
  • less
  • over time
  • by year
  • in total
  • compare
  • compared with
  • whereas
  • trend
  • pattern
  • overall
  • feature
  • note
  • point
  • difference
  • lead
  • catch up
  • late
  • early
  • century
  • decade
  • period
  • 2000
  • 1800
  • 1900
  • continuous
  • steady
  • rapid
  • fast
  • slow
  • periods
  • numbers
  • data
  • report
  • describe
  • summarise
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