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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

Now people in many countries can live and work anywhere they choose with improved communication technology and transport. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

It is often believed that people living in many countries are able to live and work anywhere
due to
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 improved
communication
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 & transport. I totally agree with the statement and would try to
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 my viewpoint regarding the same. One compelling reason for
this
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 view is that globalisation has brought the globe to our fingertips. Reflecting back
at
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on
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 the past, we can definitely sense
that
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apply
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how
communication
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 has assisted an individual to perform their duties with ease.
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, a person who is working from home is still able to connect & communicate with the team members
due to
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an advance
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advance
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advanced
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communication
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 application system in place in their place of employment.
Additionally
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, we are
also
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 able to see an
augment
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augmentation
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 in the transport industry and how
this
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 infrastructure has contributed towards the benefits of
the
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apply
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society.
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, a person who is living far from the central business district area
are
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is
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 now easily able to commute to work with improved mobility.
However
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, advancement of the above has
also
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lead
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led
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 to
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an increased
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increased
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increase
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 in productivity and
employee
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employees
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 are able to contribute towards the successful development of the company. With better
communication
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many
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, many
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multi nationals
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multinational
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 companies have
also
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 decided to outsource many roles has
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this leads
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led
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 to effective
cost cutting
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cost-cutting
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 and is only possible because of globalisation. In conclusion,
although
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this
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 has
some
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so
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 many
merit
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merits
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, I firmly believe in the long run,
this
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 will be more beneficial for society and individuals.

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task response
Talk about both sides of the question and say which side is stronger.
task response
Give more clear and full ideas, show why the point matters.
grammar
Check grammar and fix errors like subject-verb, tense, and word form.
cohesion
Use more simple linking words to connect ideas.
structure
Keep one idea per paragraph and end with a short summary.
content
Clear view and stance are stated.
structure
There is a plan with a start, body, and end.
content
Examples are used to show ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Remote work
  • Geographical constraints
  • Global understanding
  • Socio-economic disparities
  • Carbon footprint
  • Work-life balance
  • Brain drain
  • Economic disparity
  • Cultural enrichment
  • Environmental costs
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