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Band 6

The pie charts below show the percentage of housing owned and rented in the UK in 1991 and 2007. Summarize the information by describing the main features of the charts and making comparisons where appropriate.

The pie charts provide key information about housing
owner
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owners
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 and
rented
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renters
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 in
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UK
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the UK
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 in
two
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the two
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 years 1992 and 2007. The unties are measured in percentages.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that the
home woners
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homeowners
 are the highest
number
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 in
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UK
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the UK
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. The social
renithing
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renting
 recorded the second highest
fiugres
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figures
,
whereas
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 the social housing has the lowest
number
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.
According to
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 what is
shwon
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shown
 that the home owners have the highest
number
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which
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, which
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recorded
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was recorded
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60
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at 60
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% in 1992
and
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, and
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 the
fiugres
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figures
 of home
woners
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owners
 were going to
increse
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increase
 in 20007
which
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, which
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 was 70%
from
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of
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 the total
of
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apply
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housing in
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UK
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the UK
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. For the second highest
types
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type
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 is social renting
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, wich
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wich
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which
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 was the
number
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 in 1991 about 23% when it was the
number
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decrese
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decreased
in
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apply
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2007
gradully fom
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gradually from
 23% to 17 %. In terms of the
figres
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figures
 of private renting
remand staple
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remained stable
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 in 1991 and 2007
which
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, which
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 was 11% in both years.
However
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, the
scocial
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social
 housing
acount
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accounts
 for the west
fiugres
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figures
 from the housing owned and rented in the
UK
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, wich
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wich
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which
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 was in 1991 about 6% and
decrese
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decreased
 in 2007 to 2 %
from
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of
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 the housing in the
UK
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.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • owned
  • rented
  • housing
  • show
  • decreased
  • increased
  • shift
  • trend
  • years
  • common
  • prices
  • economic
  • changes
  • people
  • homes
  • compared
  • specific
  • features
  • main
  • information
  • around
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