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Write a letter to your friend who has asked you about a short course, which you have done. Write about the content of the course. The future benefit of the course.

Cheers! Hope everything is well on your side. Just today I've seen the email that you had enquired about the short course , which I have done since I was having end-of-term exams. Am sure my reply is not
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too late
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. As you know, before I was in modelling
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, but
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 later I settled for baking. At
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 I had challenges multi-tasking
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 later I adjusted.
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 doing it part-time so that whenever we have our parties ,
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 of purchasing baked food, I can prepare it free of charge. As a way of appreciating our friendship of many years. Right?
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, I do sell to my colleagues and neighbours
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 that has enabled my stay in
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 city
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 I don't bother my parents that much. The most significant issue with being a pastry is that
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 you will never lack something in your pocket. That's a sure bet. Feel free to chat with me for more information. From you bestie Jane

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task response
Explain more about the short course. Say what topics you did, what skills you learned, and give a small example.
coherence
Make clear paragraphs. Start with a friendly hello, then a paragraph about the course content, then a paragraph about future use, and end with a closing.
tone
Friendly tone that fits a letter to a friend.
greeting closing
Good opening and closing lines in a casual way.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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