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As computers are being used more and more in education, there will be soon no role for teachers in the classroom. Discuss advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

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assignments
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grammar
Fix basic spell and word mistakes so the text is clear.
structure
Give a clear start. State your view in the first paragraph.
coherence
Use clear topic sentence in each paragraph to show the idea.
content
Add more real and specific example to back your point.
conclusion
Finish with a short, clear end that sums up.
lexical
Use simple and exact words; avoid long form and odd spellings.
structure
Two sides are shown (pros and cons).
conclusion
There is a clear end with a call to balance.
content
Some real examples like WhatsApp and video are used.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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