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Maintaining public libraries is a waste of time since computer technology is now replacing their functions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

According to
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 some, the maintenance of public libraries is a waste of precious time because of sophisticated technology, which is replacing their importance. I partially agree with
this
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 statement, as everything has its own necessity; books work as companions for many
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, wether
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wether
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whether
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 technology is flourishing by leaps and bounds. People spent time in
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the liberary
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liberary
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library
 and concentrated more on studying because it has rules to maintain discipline, which helps them to be more focused. Apart from it, children should gain knowledge from books, as mobiles and other technological devices are
also
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 a main source of distraction, which disturbs them and becomes their medium for failure.
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, a recent study has shown that students get higher scores when they study only from books, as compared to those who use phones or laptops to complete their tasks.
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, spending time on the maintenance of public libraries is not a waste; it's worth it.
On the other hand
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, technology has its own importance because it has an ocean of knowledge, and people can get any information at
anytime
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 throughout the world.
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convienient
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convenient
 and accessible to everyone as people do not have to move from one place to another to gain information.

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task response
Task response: You took a view but you need to be clear and more full in points. In your plan, say yes or no in one line, then give two or three reasons with one simple example for each. Make a short final line to rest your view.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your text has good parts but the link between sentences and ideas is not always clean. Use a simple plan: one idea per para, start each para with a topic sentence, then give one reason and one example, and finish with a short line.
task response
Clear view is shown; you partly agree which fits task.
coherence cohesion
You talk about both sides, which keeps balance.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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